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Wendell, Gabe, and Rashad

Monday, February 2, 2009

Imprisonment, Visitation Rights, and Freedom

Imprisonment is something that happens to everyone. It could happen during at a restaurant while choosing from the menu, or even at a sports game. Many people are imprisoned in everyday life but only a small few are imprisoned in a detention center. If this ever happened to me I do not know what I would do without seeing someone who is very important to me.

If I ever became imprisoned for any reason there would be a number of people who I would want to see. It would be very arduous (F.A.S.T.) to choose only two people because I care about all of them and the I would not want to disappoint someone. I would probably choose to see my two baby brothers. My parents would be a choice, but whenever I see the two little faces it makes me think of my parents, my family, and my friends. (Tricolon)Though they may not know it yet, my two little brothers drive me to succeed in my life. For example; basketball they both love the sport and enjoy watching me play it. I would also want to see them to tell them not to make the same mistakes that I had made to arrive in the prison. The two little hearts bring me even closer to succeeding; just like Miranda would make Ferdinand survive his imprisonment.

I would like to be as free as a leaf hanging off of a branch. Though it may be imprisoned for a short while it is able to become free once it dispatches. (F.A.S.T) The leaf would not have to worry about anything when it is floating in the air for its short moment of glory. It has a choice, to fall fast, to drift slowly, or to whip wildly in the wind. (Tricolon) This leaf can also become whatever it wants to be while imprisoned on the tree. It can explore the possibilities of size, shape, and color. (Tricolon) This - sometimes small - piece of art can have any permutation (F.A.S.T.) it would like to. This leafs journey is a short one but one that is filled with many surprises.

Imprisonment is something that happens to people who break rules; but there is always some way you can forgive these people. Family are usually the first people to stand by their loved ones and visit them while they are imprisoned. Freedom is probably the most appreciated form of forgiveness that it has on some occasions changed peoples lives.



1 comment:

Wendell Frink said...

Rashad: Very nice beginning paragraph.
Pros: I liked how you went from one chunk to the other.
Cons: In the first sentence of the paragraph you need a comma. It looks as though you forgot a letter in a word.