(1) When someone hears the strumming of a guitar, or the beating of a drum sometimes they cant help but dance. (2)The power music has over people is simply amazing. (3)Music can make someone change their opinion on a situation or cure them from any ailment they have received. (4)Caliban has a certain thing that happens to him whenever he hears music and so do I.
(TS)When Caliban hears the voice of Ariel singing it takes him away to his own happy place and makes him almost a different person. (SD)Since the music changes himself as a whole he also has a different personality. (CM)Caliban tranforms into a peaceful creature, rather than the hideous one that he is on a regular basis. (CM)"Sounds of sweet airs, that give delight and hurt not." (SD)Caliban has shown his soft side showing that he is not just a flat one sided character, but a vivid sphere with multiple sides. (CM)Even though Caliban is imprisoned by Prospero he is probably also imprisoned by music. (CM)Wheneven Ariel sings it almost puts him into a trance in which anyone can manipulate him. (SD)Caliban will do whatever someone tells him to do as long as he is under this trance of music. (CM)Caliban is also different in his dreams. (CM)When he sleeps he hears many songs and they are so good that he thought the "clouds would open and show riches". (CS)Therefore when he awoke he would "cry to dream again" because it is such a powerful force above him. (CS)Caliban becomes tranced in music but it is the only thing that lets him become free from all of his other imprisonments.
(TS)When I hear a tune I may not become as tranced as Caliban but I do still become tranced. (SD)When I listen to music I become calm and sometimes it even helps me focus. (CM)When doing homework doing homework helps me get through it faster that I would without it. (CM)It also helps me become calm when I am angry or even when I am sad. (SD)Music makes me become tranced somewhat like Caliban almost to the point that I have to continue playing a song until I can hear it with no interruptions. (CM)This can be annoying at times when someone is talking on the phone or having a conversation because I will have to repeat the song all the way from the beginning. (CM)Most of the time though the song is on the radio so I will have no chance of hearing it again. (SD)Lastly, music has an important role that it plays every night. (CM)When I go to bed the first thing that I use to help is my radio. (CM)At night it calms me enough to put me to sleep. (CS)Music is an incredible force that can cause people to go to extreme measures to hear a certain song.
(1)Many people are affected by the incredible power music. (2)They can become become calm and even in some cases people can become entranced like Caliban was. (3)Everyone has some kind of weakness from music no matter if they like it or not; but everyones weakness is unique.
2 comments:
Pros- I really liked your opening paragraph because it stated what the rest of the essay was going to be about quite nicely
Cons- Delete unnecessary words. For example "he is probably also imprisoned by music" could just be "he is also imprisoned by music. Also there were some areas where you could have used fast words. E.g. "they are so good" could be "they are so excellent or intriguing" one of the two.
overall good job shad!
Pros: I like how you thought of Caliban and music being as an imprisonment. Nice Job.
Cons: In your first body paragraph in the second CM first SD, I don't think that quote works there. Maybe you could try adding some other words and make it less awkward. In the second body paragraph I would advise you to read it over. You will find a couple of mistakes.
Overall nice job!!!
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